These days, it’s hard to be anywhere when you have no internet or phone connection. Absence is one of the trials of traveling around the country like we are–you never know when you will be out of touch. I’m writing this from the local Ignacio, New Mexico, library on the Ute Indian Reservation. All you readers and writers out there, remember to support your local library!
“There are eight computers lined up against the south wall of the library.”
Hey writers, do you know what is wrong with that sentence? It reeks of dullness. When I read it, I think, “So what?” Unless, of course, your point is: “Here’s a list of the things I see, a rather uninteresting list and they don’t do much but sit there.” Your reader doesn’t know why, but is disappointed and unexcited by your writing when you use a “to be” verb phrase, especially at the beginning of a sentence, paragraph, or chapter. Like Hamlet, these items exist, but don’t contain any action. Even Hamlet wasn’t all that interesting until he decided to act.
It is, there is, there are, etc. When you are editing your work, look for these “to be” verb phrases and replace them with more interesting, active verbs. Doing so might even lead you into a nice metaphor or simile. As in: “Eight computers strategically line the south wall of the library like little soldiers waiting for duty.” Okay. You may think the sentence is a little silly, but at least it’s interesting.
So, find these little devils and perk up your writing by replacing them. You will be surprised by how much better your story or article will read. I was.
I may be posting from the Sky Ute Casino next time. They are supposed to have a pretty good buffet. Oops, was that a “to be” beginning back there?